Tropical rock pool
One day at a tropical rock pool. I saw a bamboo ladder I could see a black hole. It looked like it could suck you and teleport you somewhere else. I could do bombing and op a fat manu. ‘’Have you ever been here’’? Well I haven’t this is my first time being here.
I just found it on the internet my friends told me. I was surprised at how beautiful it was it was like a tropical pool. It was surrounded by trees. I would jump off the ladder and do bombs It looked like Hawaii but it wasn’t. The water was 8 foot high it could go up to 10 or 20. It was
tall The ladder would go up to 40 feet high. If you climb all the way up it will just go to a main road where you can buy delicious food. It was one of the best pools in the world nearly every one would come here.
But when I went to the pool It was magical when no one was there except for me. It was see through water It was like you could drink out of it. But I didn’t want to cause people might of peed or farted in the pool. It was crystal clear you could drink whenever you want.
awesome writing you could put more full stops
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Jordan nice writing here's a tip try fixing your punctuation." What is your favourite story you have written so far?"
ReplyDeleteKIA Ora Jordan your blog post was so amazing it reminds me of going to the Islands. what would it be like if you go there
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Jordan!
ReplyDeleteI like how you had punctuation and paragraphs in your writing. My favourite part was when you wrote about when you went to the pool it was magical. It was funny when you wrote "but I didn't want to cause people might of peed and farted in the tropical pool."
Who was your friends in your story?